Hi, On Tue, Oct 3, 2017 at 1:07 PM, Ilhan Polat <ilhanpolat@gmail.com> wrote:
While I agree with Bennet and Matthew, I think the item should sound as much as its importance. If it starts to sound like a Terms and Conditions text it would defeat the purpose in my opinion. I would go along the lines of
Help your audience by keeping the discussion focused. Your email will be read by hundreds of people on different media (including search engine hits). Many can only afford to skim through the mails to decide whether the subject is related to their expertise. Placing a brief summary is a good practice if the content does not allow for shortening. On the other hand, this should not be taken as a basis for terseness. "Things should be as simple as possible but not simpler."
By the way, I think the numbering is off at item 3.
Terms and Conditions is rather in the eye of beholder though. Just for example, if you run these last 3 versions though readable.io you get grade level reading scores (lower = easier to read) of: Me: 4.4 Bennet: 6.6 Ilhan: 9.2 I highly recommend readable.io - I didn't run it on my stuff until just now, but I generally find it gives useful suggestions on improving clarity and readability. Cheers, Matthew